tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3537250274982016992.post8586497615955724567..comments2023-03-27T04:01:46.784-07:00Comments on Riverside Young Writers: Annabelle MarieRiverside Young Writershttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13884236476000843878noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3537250274982016992.post-13612906394425149472011-05-16T17:05:39.596-07:002011-05-16T17:05:39.596-07:00Just like you did to me, I nearly copied the whole...Just like you did to me, I nearly copied the whole thing because it's so good! It flows so nicely. <br />Things I loved were : Does sense need to be seen<br /> or heard<br /> While nonsense drifts<br /> Through crushing rationality? Sounds like something from alice in wonderland. <br /><br />Just the way you personified everything was beautiful!That Girl Named Ashhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00659647049010402354noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3537250274982016992.post-59842490922465138382011-05-16T16:13:31.653-07:002011-05-16T16:13:31.653-07:00Haley, first--you need to write a book on Annabell...Haley, first--you need to write a book on Annabelle Marie...she keeps popping up. Love "Let ingenuity slip through<br />your freezing fingers,<br />give someone just a little bit<br />of unfrigid<br />breathing room." you have captured creativity--Riverside Young Writershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13884236476000843878noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3537250274982016992.post-34571192586012502932011-05-16T12:40:18.947-07:002011-05-16T12:40:18.947-07:00I absolutely love this! Especially the first stan...I absolutely love this! Especially the first stanza and the title :) The only critique I have is that instead of saying "Annabelle Marie" in the poem, you could say "she" instead - which would sound cool, fit, and be less redundant, since her name is the title as well. It also sounds a bit more mysterious, which I think is the tone you were going for. But that's seriously the only thing I'd change - I love this poem! :)Shaylihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07813566253712493491noreply@blogger.com