tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3537250274982016992.post985547680249456963..comments2023-03-27T04:01:46.784-07:00Comments on Riverside Young Writers: where we need.Riverside Young Writershttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13884236476000843878noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3537250274982016992.post-48154649050638639302011-05-16T17:09:54.456-07:002011-05-16T17:09:54.456-07:00Your first stansa is absolutely my favorite, where...Your first stansa is absolutely my favorite, where you talk about what we've seen tumbling off mirrors. So great! And the traveler may yet dream while perhaps we fly onward, along our own mundane adventure....ugh I loove loove loove it! I always feel like a fairy when reading/listening to your poems!That Girl Named Ashhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00659647049010402354noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3537250274982016992.post-88774183841137312232011-05-16T16:07:16.885-07:002011-05-16T16:07:16.885-07:00wow your use of alliteration--helps build your moo...wow your use of alliteration--helps build your mood... and your use of you--we--I brings me into your poem. My favorite: "that motion out of the corner of your eye –" Yes, Shayli--I have seen the motion.Riverside Young Writershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13884236476000843878noreply@blogger.com