Got this idea passing notes saying nothing but rage-compliments to my friend Will of the best "man up" and "grow up" and "get over it" sayings we heard (go Full Metal Jacket and mobile Googling!)
It turns out really nicely when put into poem form :)
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That’s it
I’m sick of this
and I’m sick of you
Grow up
You’re not a loser
You were born a winner
You were the fastest sperm
of MILLIONS
The world isn’t dark
The world is only dark when you’re depressed
Do you know what that means?
That means your thoughts power your world
That means your thoughts power your world
And what are you thinking about?
Think you’re going back
Just because you’re going down?
Even if you fall on your face
You’re still moving forward.
Pick yourself back up
You’re still moving forward.
We’re sick of your bitching
Quit being a loser
If you never give up
You never lose
If you turn your back and ignore
You’ll always lose.
Shut up
Stop Whining
Stop being life’s slave
Make life your slave
Tell life what it’s going to do
Even if it throws everything at you
to slow you down.
Always remember
You’re only as powerful as you tell yourself to be
Now grow up
You’re only as powerful as you tell yourself to be
Now grow up
It's neat that you can turn cliches into something that doesn't sound terribly cliche :)
ReplyDeleteHaley - Oh the irony. Hahaha, just kidding! :P
ReplyDeleteOlivia - This poem is all cliches, though! I know it sounds very cliche, you can just say that directly haha. It isn't bad from notes passed in band class, though! xD
I'm not sure I get what you're saying with this, Max. It almost feels like one of those advice things where you write down what you'd want to say to your past self, but in this case that wouldn't make much sense.
ReplyDeleteYou're using some powerful diction, though. You've got the potential to send out a very powerful, very real message. It's just a little harsh, I think.
That's just my opinion. I could be taking it too seriously. You've got some interesting concepts in here.